Cutting Monster Entries Down to Size

I've been thinking some more about streamlining game material and wanted to take a look at monster entries.

Here's a great classic monster from the Fiend Folio: The Cifal. (Okay it's another goofy named monster, but I really do think it's cool)

Hmm. I think that entry has lots of info you really don't need, and the text is in dire need of some help to make it a lot less wordy, and good deal more clear.

Here is what I'd cut it down to:

What do you think? How verbose do you want your monster entries to be? Would you have cut the Cifal down further, or left more of the original info that I'd taken out in my updated version?